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a story 07-11-2007 23:38 к комментариям - к полной версии - понравилось!


just simple HW.
want it to be here. Time will pass and i'll have fun.
Just needed to make a story using some sent.

Autumn came. It was usual cloudy day. Joseph called me in the morning and we decided to have a little boat journey. First we were going to be together, but then came his freak friends and crazy journey has begun. I expected our boat to be huge, but it was small fishing boat. There were a lot of people on the boat: Joseph, Micas, Kyle, Sandy, Bob, Patrick, Lila, Sam, Emma and me. The sea was calm when we left the harbour, but not guys. They started to sing old English song and girls were dancing on their seats. Only Patrick was suspicious - he was calm and more over whispered something to himself. He suddenly stood up and yelled: "you, shut up!, nobody paid attention, this is the last day" - he added. We stared at him and laughed together. We thought he drank too much and decided not to listen to his crap. Patrick was strange all the time - he used to visit magic courses and used drugs, listened to heavy metal… so most of cases we did not pay attention to his "positive" discussions about death at all. So, everything was fine except that fact that we sat crowded together, but when it's fun it does not matter how. Eventually the sky turned black and all these trees around seemed more bright in comparison with darkness. Nobody paid attention to these changes except Lila. She started to take pictures and seemed so happy as it was her the best photo session. Suddenly Bob said he wanted to pee. He was too crazy to be shy. Hardly he stood up and easily fell down over this tiny boat. We had fun, but anyway noticed that there were no lifejackets and especially radio or something in the fishing boat. All the other guys decided to swim too. Girls stayed on their places. The worst thing was that storm blew up and small waves became bigger and if you want to know the truth people who stayed in the boat could not swim at all. Emma said quietly: "Patrick…" and started to cry. Lila started to take pictures of her and our boys who were far behind. They yelled, trying to swim faster, but this strong water flow did not let their dreams come true…. It reminded me a stupid horror movie with an unexpected happy end, but I did not feel any happiness. Girls yelled something about Patrick and that we were going to die. I was shocked, did not know what to do and what to think. We did not have even one oar because boys took it with them when they were trying to catch the boat. I was stocked. Finally started to cry and meanwhile was thinking about life after death. I did not want to go to hell, but I always was a bad girl, so I had no chance. I was going crazy. While I was drowning in my thoughts, boys were drowning in reality and finally when I started to realize it I just fainted. Then I heard a dull sound, but could not understand what it was. I did not want to open my eyes, but I felt dry and suddenly stopped hearing girls crying. I was confused. It was quiet and warm and the sun was shining through my eyelids. Finally I discovered myself in my room and heard cell phone calling. It was Joseph. I started to ask him a lot of questions, but he could not understand me. All he said was: "Are you all there? Okay, relax. We haven't seen each other for ages. Would you like to have a little journey? I've bought a cute fishing boat…

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интересно, сюжетик ничего, но кое-где слишком подробно, предложения односложные и ошибки в грамматике и лексике
а что за задание было? что получила?
и вот это: "needed to make a story using some..." what?
NET_TAKOI 08-11-2007-00:20 удалить
о... ну собрались тут))) еще одной дала почитать.. все по профессии)))
профессиональные замечания.

да историю надо было воообще простей простого написать. раз в 5 меньше. просто меня немного понесло.

кое-где.. это где пописать и тд. ? да..ниче не получила. завтра надеюсь просечть и просто поржать.

мне главное чтоб интересно. и все.

привет тебе.

пи.с. давалось 7 предложений про лодки и тд.
главное чтобы они были.

LI 3.9.25


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