Всем привет!Очень прошу вас оценить!!Это для меня важно. Я сейчас нуждаюсь в объективной критике)

Now a down.But I dream of night.
I dream of rocks near to a worrying sea.
Wind and rocks - now the best for me,
Waves forse to forget all,and they are right.
Cold rocks will shelter me.
the are not able to speak and will keep my secret-
I'll tell all of them and they cave will be,
And on the rocks I'll write tears your portrait

I'll meet with winds
On the breakge of eternity
I'll meet with winds
And I'll ask to forget you
Forget you....

I shall erase your tears
But your portrait becam my scar.
I can see a brightest star,
But it seems the faded batterfly...
I'll try the touch an edge of time,
It will leave a new wound.
I to bleach memory I try,
But only darkness around..

I'll meet with winds
On the breakge of eternity
I'll meet with winds
And I'll ask to forget you
Forget you....


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